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Jade approaches a table where an unaware Kenda is sitting with a lavender-tinted milkshake in hand.
"Kenda-kun~!"
Kenda jumps at the sound of Jade's voice.
"Eeeh? Oh..."
Jade chuckles with amusement as Kenda's complexion becomes a bit more pink from embarrassment.
"Hello to you too~!"
Kenda looks at Jade with shy admiration.
"H-hello..."
Jade then sets her milkshake on the table and lightly kisses Kenda on the forehead.
"You want some? It is Omnomberry..."
Kenda swallows and lightly nods.
Jade chuckles once more as she takes out two straws from seemingly nowhere and places them in the drink.
"Go on... Drink up."
As Kenda tries to drink some, he seems to struggle in getting the drink to flow through the straw.
"Eeh?"
He then sucks harder...and harder...until finally when he releases his suction...the straw squirts quite a bit onto his lips.
"Eeh?!"
Jade chuckles as she sees all of this unfold.
"Oh my... Looks like it decided to be difficult... Let me help you..."
As Jade pulls out a napkin and begins to wipe the drink from Kenda's face, his face begins to redden a bit more.
"T-thank you..."
Jade nods with understanding as she cracks a wide smile.
"No problem! After all...it is convenient..."
Kenda tilts his head to the side in confusion.
"Why is that?"
"...Because...it makes what I am about to do more delectable."
"What are you-?"
Kenda's inquiry is cut short as Jade leans forward to give Kenda a brief, but passionate, kiss on his still-slightly-moist lips.
Prompt: Milkshake (The two characters must share a milkshake...)
Prompting Character: Kenda Gallis (kendagallis/~Axeletta)
Prompted Character: Jade Whispersilk

Questions:

1. What do you think Omnomberries (from Tyria/Guild Wars 2) taste like?
2. Were you surprised by Jade's eventual action?
3. How was I with writing for Kenda? Did I portray him well? Any pointers to help me portray him better in the future? (Those who KNOW the character only plz)
4. Any other comments? Criticism?
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Axeletta Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
1. .... Like raspberries, or a cherry pie :dummy:
2. No, lol.
3. I approve! Only thing I'd point out i-is... th-that you could... stutter, more, and l-learn his comma patterns (as I just used them in conjunction with the pause!). However, there wasn't enough dialogue to get a full show on his speech, so that's more of a tip for the future :P If you want more tips, he also does a lot of nodding and head-tilting. .... But you may have already known that. But yes, you got just about everything right, here!
4. None in particular! I liked it very much. This is going to sound strange, but you are very talented with word selection and sentence structure (not just here, but in all of your writings).
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poisoned-poet Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
1. I always imagine that it has a magically delectable taste...like the fusion of a cherry, strawberry, and something else...
2. XD
3. I see... However, there is only so much that I can do that would work. After all...what is written doesn't have to 100% match how it is said.
4. X3 Thanks! (also, the part where Kenda was trying to drink...did that seem slightly erotic to you?)
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Axeletta Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
4. Slightly :XD:
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poisoned-poet Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
...I meant to do it that way.

Subtle yaoi bits.

Also, even though I am a supporter of male homosexual relationships...I oppose Yaoi hands. Because they are an abomination unto themselves. XD
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Axeletta Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
omfg yes. Yaoi hands are WTF.
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poisoned-poet Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Why do they even exist? Who thought they were EVER a good idea?
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Axeletta Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist General Artist
Nooo ideaaaa.

..... Also, I'm not a yaoi fangirl here so I'm sure my POV on them is twice as 'wtf' as yours :P
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poisoned-poet Featured By Owner Dec 29, 2012  Hobbyist Writer
Also, Sever has returned on Tumblr. *throws confetti up lacklusterly*
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